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Failure

August 20, 2015

Sean Michael, July 2015

Hope withers
and hatred blossoms,
the inward kind.

Pain is all you feel.
Failure is all you know.
Destruction is the course.

Dreams lie shattered at your feet
and flash mobs dance upon them,
crushing and grinding.

The bitterness is sharp
like a blade splitting the tongue.
You grind your teeth in agony.

A sadness sets in
that seems to last forever…
It just won’t go away.

I know how you feel.

 

Posted for  dVerse Poets, Open Link Night #153, August 20, 2015

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26 Comments
  1. You know…in these words I feel I know you. At least I know these feelings. I know failure. Wish I didn’t but then again, I guess it’s all part of the big picture.

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    • I’m happy to have connected with you. I’ve always been a loner and have often felt far away, but writing gives me a sense of presence.

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  2. Poignant in its truth and simplicity.

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  3. That last line change the whole sense from a complaint to compassion.. It makes all the difference.

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  4. Yeah, I know a bit how you feel as well.
    Its like a fog that settles in the space between mountains
    too thick to see through.

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  5. wow…a strong end line..so well expressed….

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  6. You describe that feeling that goes with failure so well. Love these lines:
    Dreams lie shattered at your feet
    and flash mobs dance upon them,
    crushing and grinding.
    Great imagery.

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    • People commented on that line the most. I wrote it in moment that I felt things were going wrong and in my vulnerability, others were parading on my failures. But then it could have been all in my mind.

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  7. This is exactly how a person feels when faced with loss or failure.. a vivid piece.
    Well penned.

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  8. Every fall has a climb and so also failure a victory.Touching lines.

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  9. Pain Fire Fear
    where is bottom
    fall.. where
    do rocks
    fall
    where
    bottom
    lies
    where
    do we
    go
    when
    bottom
    lies
    a
    way
    up
    no hope
    no faith
    no nothing
    just will
    just
    will survive
    as all who
    cast down
    get here now..:)

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  10. “Dreams lie shattered at your feet
    and flash mobs dance upon them”
    turned that familiar line on its head, you did! 🙂 Like the others, I love your ending too.

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  11. Very powerful write – I feel I have been through that stage in life to understand and relate to each of your words…

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  12. The imagery of flash mobs dancing upon shattered dreams….whoa….now that is intense and vividly demonstrates an understanding of deep pain.

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    • Deep pain I have come to understand, suffering severe depressions since an early age.

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      • I am so sorry to hear that this has been your experience, particularly from a young age.

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  13. Ha ha. This is perfect:

    “Dreams lie shattered at your feet
    and flash mobs dance upon them,
    crushing and grinding.”

    I love that!

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