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The Killer and the Lover

April 2, 2015

by Sean Michael

There’s a murderer in my head;
A martyr lies asleep in my bed:
True love is worth fighting for, she says.

He wields a poisoned-tip dagger,
He’ll thrust it through her heart,
There’s a murderer in my head.

She awakens and blinks the sleep from her eyes;
I wonder why she’s not some place better instead:
True love is worth fighting for, she says.

He clasps his hand around the hilt violently,
He moves toward her silently;
There’s a murderer in my head.

She’s a firm believer in truth and love.
So beautiful, she lies there in my bed.
True love is worth fighting for, she says.

You should have loved someone else instead,
I’m afraid I’ll ruin this relationship,
There’s a murderer in my head.
True love is worth fighting for, she says.

Photo credit: Twilight

Photo credit: Twilight

Posted for  dVerse Poets, The Art of Villanelle, April 2, 2015

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20 Comments
  1. Glenn Buttkus permalink

    Interesting shot at the Villanelle, & the form seems pretty close to parameters, but you lost me with the rhyme scheme; no sweat, I like the feel of it, the irony within it. You included the (5) tercets & the final quatrain, with 2 repeating rhymes & 2 refrains, so good on you for that. We’ll let Grace be the final word on the rhyming. This is my first visit to your site, & I liked what I found; thanks.

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    • Always nice to hear someone likes the site and to have poetry appreciated.I read about villanelles a while ago after reading Sylvia Plath’s “Mad Girl’s Love Song,” and whatever I read then mentioned this more unconventional way with the rhyme scheme or lack thereof.

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  2. I wonder who will win out in the end ~ It sounds like two people having contrasting thoughts, one of killing, and one believing in true love ~ I specially like the refrain of:

    There’s a murderer in my head. Such dark thoughts can lead to grim actions.

    Thanks for participating and wishing you Happy Easter ~

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  3. If this is your first villanelle, you did well with the form!

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  4. Excellent juxtaposition between the characters depicted in the lines of the villanelle….it brings such a unique sense of balance to the form. Really creative!

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  5. Sherry Marr permalink

    This poem resonates with me. Unfortunately I am the woman in the bed, LOL………

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    • Maybe not so unfortunate, Sherry, because it isn’t over yet. Or is it? You’ll have to be the one to tell me.

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  6. Oooh, and I thought I was far too dark and sombre for the season… Glad to see I’m not the only one! I think it’s an unconventional rhyming scheme you went for in the end, isn’t it? Works well, there are clever echos of rhymes, just not in the expected places.

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    • I read about villanelles a while ago after reading Sylvia Plath’s “Mad Girl’s Love Song,” and whatever I read then mentioned this more unconventional way with the rhyme scheme or lack thereof. It was fun to write, but doubt I’ll try another. I tend to write dark poetry…

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  7. Well done, if scary.

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  8. I thought the poem was intriguing, I am not sure about the form but, I found the darkness mesmerizing wondering if he is afraid to love as he will break her heart.

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    • Yep, the murderer is insecurity and everything that’s messed up with him. He is afraid to ruin the relationship.

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  9. We would really appreciate it if you can visit and return the comments as a courtesy with linking up with D’verse ~ The 4th bullet point at the end of the post reads:

    Read and comment on your fellow poets’ poems.

    Have a good day ~

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    • I do try to comment. Just as Grandma says, I’m in prison, so it takes extra long to get the poems and send back. This connection with dVerse has been great for me. Thanks for allowing me access.

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  10. From Sean’s Grandma: Sean does read and comment on those poems that I print and mail to him. Because of prison restrictions, I can not send him more than 10 web pages at once. And of course, his comments are not posted for a couple of weeks or sometimes more. Sorry it can’t be faster.

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    • That is fine ~ I was not aware of the circumstances of his writing ~ Best regards ~

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